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Hi! I read the little blurb and character traits for your book, “MANIFEST” and while I’m not anywhere near as professional of a writer as GK, I’m still a writer and I think I could give a few notes.

– First off, the title? It’s amazing. The second I read the title I knew I wanted to read this story. It’s very intriguing and begs the readers a question: What is the Manifest?

– The idea is AWESOME!!! The drawing and it comes to life is something that is used quite a bit, but you made your own GREAT spin on it. Where the drawings become evil? That sounds really fun.

– Concerning the plot, there is one more thing I’m worried about. The tone shift. You say “the book takes a turn into a thriller afterwards.” Which is really great, but I’m assuming you were intending possibly a more light-hearted tone? In my opinion, I don’t like tone shifts and they don’t always work. If you are planning to do a tone shift, then maybe don’t make it too obvious, but still do it how you want. That’s just my opinion though.

– The characters all sound really fun! However, how are Kokanee and Jesse connected to Mara and Pato? I get it’s a book club, but possibly there could be a teensy connection between the two Duos.

– Also about the book club, are you planning to make it an anchor for your story or just have it starting it off? I think either could work if you do it well.

Overall, I would definitely read the story and remember this is just my opinion. Good luck!

Your fellow writer, Logan