Hi, Timothy,
Thanks for posting. And congratulations on your book! Will I edit it? Sorry, no. For one thing, I'm not an editor. And for another, I've had to make it my policy not to read other people's work. I get so many requests that I would be working on other books, and neglecting my own.
My advice: take your book to someone you really like and trust -- a sibling, a parent, an aunt or uncle, or perhaps a favorite teacher. There you'll get an honest opinion on your work. And polish your book until you're satisfied with it! At the beginning of a writing career, it's the writer's opinion that matters most.
Good luck, Timothy. I hope this first effort is the start of something great!
Regards. -----Gordon Korman-----